You do not see the loss from her gain

i dont like that line. it seems its put there just for the rhyme..

i loved reading the rest though!

it was, but it makes sense with the rest of the poem, thanx

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_~Fiery~_~Dragoness~_


Believing isnt about seeing, Believing is about knowing

I am my own demise
maybe thats why I never really liked myself

nice i like it

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personal quote: "dont ever give up on your dreams go for them full force!"

thanx

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_~Fiery~_~Dragoness~_


Believing isnt about seeing, Believing is about knowing

I am my own demise
maybe thats why I never really liked myself

n/p

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personal quote: "dont ever give up on your dreams go for them full force!"

I understand the meaning, and that you are talking about yourself on a personal level.

but there in rhyming poems there need to be a consistant rhyming pattern, and sometimes you have to struggle in how you word things so that they flow more easily.

a hint is that you get an idea, then you get a beat in your head, then you stick to both the idea and the beat NO MATTER WHAT. cuz then it can flow more easily in yours and other peoples heads. The first two stanzas make me have to readjust my reading pattern because they are jagged and not in a particular beat.

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I'm so tall, that like tall people are tall.

DO THE MASHED POTATO!

Risa: Tall is the new black! [goes and gets platforms.]
Me: Black is the new black. GO YANKEES!

I`m not mad, its just, all u seem to be able to say about me lately is bad things, and I never hear the good, and then u act like I do nothing and dont spend time on everything, and it hurts me alot

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_~Fiery~_~Dragoness~_


Believing isnt about seeing, Believing is about knowing

I am my own demise
maybe thats why I never really liked myself

well you don't pay that much attention with me at all, and you praise and treat everyone else on their talents and then with me i'm just there and yes, I work very, very hard, and you admitted to me before you wait last minute to do your work, and before your teachers extended your stuff a lot, and so you got lots of breaks and so I figure you still do, and I still have to plan a lot of things...and yet, no matter how I try, I keep either getting worse or I stay in the same spot, and with you, you might do a couple of days of effort, and I have to do a full week or something or more, do a full weekend a lot of times at home of homework and I still don't get a lot of credit, and then you do do a lot better than me at everything and everyone thinks you're smarter and better than me. And you treat everyone else like they're better, and you don't wanna hang out with me like you wanted to before, you want to hang out with people in art like Lauren and everyone else because they're better than me, and so I'm getting ignored and it's just...I'm getting people's backs and now the only person who gave me their front is now leaving so now you who hangs out with the others is now gonna leave me and so what's the point ya know? Plus, I put in a lot of extra effort, and I don't get credit, and you do what it takes to barely get by, and you get it all...I don't see how it's fair.

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I'm so tall, that like tall people are tall.

DO THE MASHED POTATO!

Risa: Tall is the new black! [goes and gets platforms.]
Me: Black is the new black. GO YANKEES!

stop figuring, and I give just a much praise to u as everyone else, rather u feel that way or not
u need to do what works for u, I do what works for me
I dont get alot of Hw, and when I have it I tend to finnish in class
I dont know who thinks im smatter and better, and the girls in the cafe dont count!!! or atleast I dont pay attention to them
I dont see the change in me hanging out with people
I dont feel that I ignore u I have to give time to all my friends ur not my only friend
I give my front, gez

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_~Fiery~_~Dragoness~_


Believing isnt about seeing, Believing is about knowing

I am my own demise
maybe thats why I never really liked myself